Hmm...
Not a bad flash by any means. Not at all. Here were my problems.
1- The colors are waaaaaaay too dull and brownish. The whole aesthetic is drab and stirs no excitement.
2- The dialouge is unnatural and flat. These don't sound like words chosen by teenagers whatsoever.
3- I could not connect with any of the charecters. Frankly, I did not care about any of the charecters. I swear I have heard all of their voices before.
In short, this is NOT a bash or a personal attack by any means. Use more color, go through some old yearbooks and put back the spark.